Check Logical Flow & Argument Cohesion

Act as a Critical Reader (AI limitations acknowledged). Please review this passage from my essay draft for logical flow and argument cohesion. My overall thesis is: '[Thesis Statement, if helpful]'.
Passage: '[Paste Section/Passage of Your Draft Essay Here]'
Identify any potential:
- Gaps in logic or abrupt shifts in focus.
- Inconsistencies in the argument.
- Areas where the connection between ideas seems weak or unclear.
- Sentences that don't seem to clearly support the paragraph's main point or overall thesis.
*Purpose: To get feedback on the structure and flow of MY draft for revision. AI cannot truly evaluate the argument's validity.*